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Thank you Tim for completing your essay assignment. Please ensure that you carefully edit and look at the anchor to ensure you have all the criteria needed for a persuasive essay. You have some very good arguments to support your stand. I suggest you strengthen you call to action by stating just how people can right the wrong- just an idea! Keep working, you are getting there! Be careful not to be too emotional about your points. A good argument can be emotional and meaningful especially with true supporting facts. For example, newspaper articles or research to support your argument. Ms C :)

__//**Tim's page**//__ __//**i belive that prisoners should not be able to have these luxery because they are in there for a reason and there ther to get away from luxrys and nicness and be in closed so you cant contact any one.**//__

Prison, nobody wants to go because of its reputation but is it really as bad as we think? I did some research and found that some prisons are not that bad. They get computers state of the art exercise equipment comfy beds t.v’s and much more. I personally think this is wrong and should not be allowed. They are in the prison for one reason and that is to keep them away from civilization. Not to chat with friends on Facebook or Hotmail. They write books and are making money off the experience that is supposed correct them from their wrong. Lastly and what I believe to be pretty important is prison is not a hotel it is a correctional facility. There are rapists, killers, pedophiles and many more. They go to prison to be concealed from the world but then they get computers and phones. Could you imagine, your child has just been violated by someone, they go to jail then are able to call and talk to your child from prison? Now you might say that the phone and computer are monitored. Well they are criminals they are apparently not scared about getting in trouble so they will sneak in and use this without permission. I mean they are criminals Some criminals write books in prison about their life there, why they were there and their life story. I personally believe this to be ridiculous and not right. Why should they be paid for a violent or inappropriate deed they did? It’s like worshiping Hitler for murdering the Jewish. Not only is this wrong, but the very fact of this makes me angrily disappointed in our legal system and makes me hate the idea of prisoners’ luxury. I saw that one publisher who was a prisoner wrote a book that sold millions and he got every cent of the profit. I skipped through and it practically said that he was addicted to drugs because he wanted to try it. Well all that tells me is that he screwed his life up himself. Later in the book he was caught with possession and distribution of narcotics. So not only did he screw himself up but he helped screw everyone else life to. So nice of them. Prison is not a hotel. You don’t go to relax and hang out maybe find new friends. This should not happen. If they are going to give them all these privilege then why not just send them to great wolf lodge and put some bars on the doors. Alot of people in prison don’t want to leave. Nine time out of ten there houses are worse then jail. Now most people say "What if they’re not guilty of the crime?". Okay, so I was one of them at first. So I researched this and there are so many steps in to announcing the people as guilty that if you are lucky one person for four years might be innocent so that good statistics for people who are innocent go to jail. And that one person gets only maximum 6 months in the prison. Well I don’t know about you but prisoners should not be aloud to make money have a comfy bed or contact to the outside world. So if you have a brain then you will realize that this is wrong and you will try to right this wrong by going to your city hall tell them you do not believe this is right and see if there is a way to fix this in your local prison